We were learning to write a moment in time about our most memorable experience on camp at Mahia.
The hardest part about this was recrafting it, this is my second recraft because on my first one had too many 'I' and I needed to improve in my vocabulary.
The easiest part was letting my friends help me improve in my vocabulary with bigger words and to help me with their critiques.
Lily your have made a great start to writing about a moment in time. As I read your recount I could feel your pain and your quickened heartbeat. If, as the reader I can FEEL your writing then you have an excellent understanding of personal voice to engage your audience. Ka pai! Can't wait to read more of your posts.
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